In general, I do not recommend such "optimizations" since they quickly lead to mistakes. Automata store something about the previous input sequence in the states, and maybe you destroy that invariant with your "optimizations". Your suggestions turn out to be incorrect, I tried them with a tool, in that I called the original states q0,q1,q2,q3,q4 and the new ones of your automaton p0,p1,p2,p3,p4 and then stated that ((F G (q3|q4)) <-> F G(p3|p4)) holds. I got then the following counterexample:
-> State: 1.1 <-
a = TRUE
q0 = TRUE
q1 = FALSE
q2 = FALSE
q3 = FALSE
q4 = FALSE
p0 = TRUE
p1 = FALSE
p2 = FALSE
p3 = FALSE
p4 = FALSE
-> State: 1.2 <-
a = FALSE
q0 = FALSE
q1 = TRUE
p0 = FALSE
p1 = TRUE
-> State: 1.3 <-
a = TRUE
q1 = FALSE
q3 = TRUE
p1 = FALSE
p3 = TRUE
-> State: 1.4 <-
a = FALSE
q3 = FALSE
q4 = TRUE
p3 = FALSE
p4 = TRUE
-> State: 1.5 <-
a = TRUE
q3 = TRUE
q4 = FALSE
p3 = TRUE
p4 = FALSE
-> State: 1.6 <-
q3 = FALSE
q4 = TRUE
p3 = FALSE
p4 = TRUE
-> State: 1.7 <-
a = FALSE
p3 = TRUE
p4 = FALSE
-> State: 1.8 <-
a = TRUE
q3 = TRUE
q4 = FALSE
p2 = TRUE
p3 = FALSE
-- Loop starts here
-> State: 1.9 <-
a = FALSE
q3 = FALSE
q4 = TRUE
-> State: 1.10 <-
a = TRUE
q3 = TRUE
q4 = FALSE
-> State: 1.11 <-
a = FALSE
q3 = FALSE
q4 = TRUE